WHY DOES MY THISIS SOUND SO CHOPPY (can u fix it? )
Here is my thesis
Mr. Lorry is a very loyal person. He escorted Dr. Mannet out of France, He ed Dr. Manette during his relapse and he ed his telsons bank customers escape out of France safely.
Answer:
The thesis statement sounds choppy because it lacks proper verbs and details in some parts, rendering the sentences incomplete.